How to Identify Headhopping

Point of View: Vanquish Head Hopping and Identify Your Narrator

By Kim Gore

We’ve all done it. Written a story from our character’s vantage point. Added details to make it feel authentic. Described our character with amazing acuity. And then an editor or critique partner takes a look at our incredible work and asks, “Okay, but who is the main character?”

It’s like getting splashed with a bucket of cold water. Because, duh, isn’t it obvious? But no. It isn’t always. In this hands-on presentation, Kim Gore will demonstrate how to make your main character obvious to the reader, and how to recognize when you’re doing that horrid “head-hopping” writers grumble about.

We’ll be pulling out our acting skills for this one, so be prepared to be in the spotlight. You won’t want to miss your fellow writers getting their thespian on.

This is the presentation topic for the May meeting. Come visit us to gain more information.

Introduction to WordPress

On Saturday, April 22, 2023, the presentation starting at about 10:15 AM, will be an introduction to WordPress given by Sue Spitulnik.

Sue has a blog at suespitulnik.com, which is a WordPress-hosted site, and she recently designed, with input from the members, and built the new site for Lilac City Rochester Writers using WordPress. If you are on the site and look around, it looks like an easy project. But Sue will tell you she did everything multiple times to learn how to make the site easy to traverse, attractive, and user-friendly for anyone that doesn’t know how to write computer code. On Saturday, she will show the group some of the things she learned so they can build their own free sites.

It might be an idea to bring your laptop so you can follow along as Sue shows you what the tool buttons do, how to add pages, how to add a post, and use the chat feature.

Cinquain Poetry

Colleen Chesebro, author, poet, and prose metrist, from East Lansing, Michigan, presented a class on syllabic poetry during our February meeting. The syllabic verse is determined by the number of syllables per line, rather than the number of stresses. She highlighted Crapsey cinquain poetry, the style designed by Adelaide Crapsey, a 20th-century poet born in Brooklyn and raised in Rochester.

Cinquains are five-line poems that are usually about nature or a natural phenomenon. American cinquains have a 2-4-6-8-2 syllable count and do not need to rhyme. Words that create drama are built into the fourth line. The turn occurs on line five, which is the most important line. This is where you change your focus away from the drama in some interesting way. She had us write our own poems and gave examples of different types of cinquains. Poetry can be helpful with a visual impression of scenes or characters and can assist with dramatic chapter endings.

When writing and composing syllabic poetry, it’s best to use a syllable counter to check your accuracy, e.g., https://www.traveldailylife.com/syllables/ and the ProWritingAide extension (it’s free).

Cinquain Samples Written During Presentation

Poppet  by Kathy Plum

Pretty 

Poppet, plucky 

Poppet, so sweet and so

Innocent is my playful pup

Chewer!

I Visit   by Mary Lou Heilman               

Grief stone

Holds down my joy

Imprisons my thinking

Endures forever that stone

Inert

In the School Hallway  by Kim Gore

Chatter

Bitter review

Envy wrapped in comment

Opened in a heat-filled moment

Tatter

Sunset by S. Arthur Yates

Sunset

Steals light from life

Returns it, but not all

Some is lost, never to be seen

Old age

1978 Baseball Fans  by Sue Spitulnik

Red Sox

Hate Bucky Dent

Cost them the World Series

Next Year